Analysis of at least one sequence from rough cut

We took on board the feedback and advice that was given. We made a few changes, out of these changes i am going to talk about the scene where i walked around the corner. At first, it was a match cut of me walking around the corner, now we have replaced it with a cross cut of me smiling to the camera. We decided to replace it with this because our teacher felt "jarred" by it, and because we also had a lot of shots she adviced us to use them.